Thank you to everyone who submitted a story this week! I’m amazed at the marvelous range inspired by this week’s prompt.
I loved the immediacy of C. Connolly’s “Appearances and Disappearances.” Written in second person and present tense, the story grabbed me and drew me right in. Juxtaposing the mysterious pillars with references to cell phones and Twitter, Connolly offers a wonderful meditation on humanity’s capacity for wonder and search for meaning even in the age of Google. As always I got great pleasure in Connolly’s language: “sea of shufflers grumbling forward” and “short sharp shock,” for example. Great work!
D. B. Gentner’s Lovecraftian origin myth “Time Immemorial” gave me chills. It is enormous in scope and rich in detail. From the first sentence I thought I would be taken on an epic journey and I was. Everything in the story occupied such a grand scale: the claws of a long-forgotten titan, the earth heaving and sighing, and the never-ending obsidian. Then there are the juicy details like Crawling Chaos and the tentacles of Cthulhu. So exciting!
Just for fun, my fellow Luminous Creature, Emily June Street, contributed a glorious tale set in a post-apocalyptic world. “Water” offers a perfect example of why I love Emily’s writing—every word counts in her beautifully vivid descriptions and marvelous attention to detail (pale hair dreadlocked in tangles, the narrator’s cracked lips, and that fierce wind). And then there’s the lovely ending—I felt as relieved as Jace by their discovery.
An ache of longing pervades Voima Oy’s beautifully titled “The Singing Stones.” Framed by a marvelous opening, “Sometimes I dream of home,” and a lovely ending, “Sometimes I dream of Stonehenge,” the story conveys that tug between the promise of leaving some place and the subsequent desire to return. I loved the imagery of “ancient moss temples” and the rhythm of lines like “There are languages, and libraries. There is time.” A haunting piece!
I love the power and precision of Karl A. Russell’s “A Life’s Work.” He uses rhythm and repetition to such splendid effect to convey the scope of Travis’s work. Russell’s writing has an immediacy and intimacy that always draws me right in. It’s cinematic in its clarity. And then there are heartbreaking lines such as “It almost thrummed with life, and made him sad to feel it.” Travis’s bitterness is palpable and the ending comes as a shock. Terrific work!
Because I have to, I will declare some winners:
Second runner up:
C. Connolly: For the pleasure of her language and imagery
First runner up:
Karl A. Russell: For the poetic heartbreak of his story
And this week’s winner:
D. B. Gentner: For the epic journey that tingled my spine.
Congratulations, winners! D. B. Gentner’s story will be featured on the LCP blog tomorrow!!